The key to describing an event/ experience is still to have a focus. Hence, it is important for you to have a thesis statement at the end of the introductory paragraph to state the main point of your description. We cannot afford to drift from one point to another aimlessly and risking boring our readers.

Below is an excerpt from “Charlotte’s Web by E. B. White” about the power of expectation.

“Wilbur was now the centre of attraction on the farm. Good food and regular hours were showing results: Wilbur was a pig any man would be proud of . One day more than a hundred people came to stand at his yard and admire him. Charlotte had written the word RADIANT, and Wilbur really looked radiant as he stood in the golden sunlight. Ever since the spider had befriended him, he had done his best to live up to his reputation. When Charlotte’s web said SOME PIG, Wilbur had tried hard to look like some pig. When Charlotte’s web said TERRIFIC, Wilbur had tried to look terrific. And now that the web said RADIANT, he did everything possible to make himself glow.”

  • Usually, we describe an experience chronologically ie. according to the order of happening in time.
  • Do make sure that the events have a central theme so that the details cohere (fit together to form a united whole)
  • Plan on paper the dominant theme eg. the power of expectations and then use specific characters and details to flesh out the theme.

Now making use of the above pointers, describe an experience whereby quick thinking by the protagonist(s) saved the day.

Using Similes and Metaphors

Use of figures of speech spices up your writing, making it deliciously interesting by comparing the details you are describing to something well known, thus teasing the readers’ imagination.

Similes make use of these two words: “like” and “as” whereas metaphors make a direct comparison without using those words.

Examples:

Similes

  • Like a ravenous wolf deprived of a proper meal for a whole month, he almost gobbled up the entire buffet spread.
  • She was as tightly wrapped as a chinese dumpling in the undersized red cheongsam that screamed attention.

Metaphors

  • Beneath the benign façade, he was actually a wolf in sheep’s skin.
  • “My love, you are the pure white lily who have enraptured me!”

Do collect well-crafted similes and metaphors as you read